I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 8 and in 2021 I will be a year 9. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hi Neveah, it is Kareem and I like the post. You have posted it today when we were going to read at storyonline! It is a good post because you have posted it the day we were going to put it on our slides. Ka pai
Kia ora Nevaeh. I am glad that you like using Storyline Online. I notice in your retelling, that you gave lots of details. I am also impressed with the good explanations. Next time, maybe you could add some images of the book you read. Blog you again soon.
Hi Nevaeh it's me Elham. I love how you have written character, sitting and problem for your story. Next time put a capital for you title and put some pictures. Blog you next time.
Kia ora Nevaeh! Its Sita here I really love your story that you have put in it sounds really interesting! I also love how you did a slide for each part of the story it forms it really easy to read! I also love how you didnt make the color so bright that we can read it! You did really good but you have some spelling mistakes like you wrote "store" instead of "storey". Anyway other than that you did GRRRRREAT! I have a question, have you read the book in real life? Keep up the cool work! Bye!
Hi Nevaeh Emily here. Looks like you have done really well on this. I like how you have put it into a slide and have made it look nice. Maybe next time make the words a bit more readable. Other then that I really like this blog post.
Talofa Lava Nevaeh! Milan here. This was a awesome and entertaining story but it there was some bits that was distracting me. With the font I couldn't really read it and it was hard for me to understand what the story was about, another thing that also was annoying was that the highlight that was hard for me too. One more thing is that the link was not connected to the story so that I had to look for the story and it was really hard. But everything else was good I know that the monsters name was Gabe and that the boy was telling a story about the boy and the connection with his monster. See ya later bye
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good job on the monster story you need more full stops on the last page
ReplyDeleteGood job you are freaking my out with the background
ReplyDeleteI have seen this story before and I think it is kindof cool. I like your background it is cool. from kevin :)
ReplyDeleteWow this is a amazing story By Shikarn blog you latter.
ReplyDeleteThats a SCARY STORY
ReplyDeleteHi Milla here good job as its scary..
ReplyDeleteHi Neveah, it is Kareem and I like the post. You have posted it today when we were going to read at storyonline! It is a good post because you have posted it the day we were going to put it on our slides. Ka pai
ReplyDeleteHi Nevaeh I like how you retell everything nice work.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Nevaeh.
ReplyDeleteI am glad that you like using Storyline Online. I notice in your retelling, that you gave lots of details. I am also impressed with the good explanations.
Next time, maybe you could add some images of the book you read.
Blog you again soon.
Hi Nevaeh it's me Elham.
ReplyDeleteI love how you have written character, sitting and problem for your story.
Next time put a capital for you title and put some pictures.
Blog you next time.
Kia ora Nevaeh!
ReplyDeleteIts Sita here I really love your story that you have put in it sounds really interesting! I also love how you did a slide for each part of the story it forms it really easy to read! I also love how you didnt make the color so bright that we can read it! You did really good but you have some spelling mistakes like you wrote "store" instead of "storey". Anyway other than that you did GRRRRREAT! I have a question, have you read the book in real life? Keep up the cool work!
Bye!
Hi Nevaeh, Tobey here
ReplyDeleteI like how to told us everything about the story.
Maybe next time you could make it more interesting.
Bye!
Hi Nevaeh Emily here.
ReplyDeleteLooks like you have done really well on this. I like how you have put it into a slide and have made it look nice.
Maybe next time make the words a bit more readable. Other then that I really like this blog post.
Hi Nevaeh i love it too.
ReplyDeleteTalofa Lava Nevaeh!
ReplyDeleteMilan here. This was a awesome and entertaining story but it there was some bits that was distracting me. With the font I couldn't really read it and it was hard for me to understand what the story was about, another thing that also was annoying was that the highlight that was hard for me too. One more thing is that the link was not connected to the story so that I had to look for the story and it was really hard. But everything else was good I know that the monsters name was Gabe and that the boy was telling a story about the boy and the connection with his monster. See ya later bye
hi it is jrae and i like it you witing youer onen story
ReplyDeleteHI Sonny here I like your retelling and how you know what happen really well bye.
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